Saturday, March 30, 2013

Like Ribbons of Light



Welcome to one of my favorite weekend memes, Saturday Centus! This weekly writing challenge always puts me to the "imagination" test, and I love it!  Jenny Matlock from Off On My Tangent has tossed out a great idea for us this week. We are to write a piece that begins with the words, "Our Fingers Entwined Like Ribbons of Light" using our choice of expression which could be prose, poetry, lyric, etc. Our only requirement is that we use no more than 107 words.  My submission follows with the prompt in bold.  Enjoy!


Our fingers entwined like ribbons of light.  It felt incredible to experience my mother's touch again after so many years. My entire body was engulfed in the warmth of the light as I explored her face with my hands. She was so beautiful and her smile drew me closer as we embraced.  Then, in an instant, I was pulled back from her and she faded, along with the light and the warmth.  I cried out to her, but she was no longer there.  My body shook. I opened my eyes and found a masked medical team hovering above...cheering.  They just scored a three-pointer at the buzzer!


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Jenny Matlock

11 comments:

Tracy Cook said...

That was a good twist. Well written

Aurora Hylton said...

Wow--that was really intense! I'm a nurse on a med-surg floor. Most of our people are there for fairly routine surgeries so I've not seen anyone "back from the brink." It happens a bit down in ICU, and of course in the ER.

lissa said...

a somber take on the prompt but a good one.

hope you have a sweet day.

Karen S. said...

Oops! I'll be back can't read yours until I do mine!

Viki said...

This was excellent. I could really feel the intensity of the moment. Well done!

Sue said...

Really well done. And I loved the story line.

=)

Karen S. said...

I'm back! Just got mine written! What a fun prompt this week is too! I like Jenny's little twist of having us begin with the same sentence! Yours rocks, I like how you gave us a sharp 180 at the end! Very delightful! From tears to joy!

writingmuscle said...

Well done, its the ribbons of light that I also felt makes it a spiritish theme!
Nice twist.
Liz

Pamela Beers. said...

Very touching story. I was riveted the whole time I read it.

Bo said...

I could feel her love for her mother and the pain to be ripped away from her. Very good writing.

Jenny said...

Exhilirating and then depressing!

Great writing!

I loved the 'twist'!